Asymptomatic symptoms it may seem,
and nothing grave, and nothing too severe
But soon as it would manifest with pain
one could conclude that Influenza's here
The sickness in itself is treatable
with minor cases of mortality
the seasoned strain is ample dangerous
due variant viral switched identity
I'd recommend a panic - free approach
though easier said than done, it potent is.
The prophylactic regimen if sought
can prove to feint conditions such as this
But if by fleeting chance one sickens yet
one shouldn't fret his bed with much regret.
Take your time, and comment honestly please
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I liked this but it got my attention,,,because around here there has been a boy of 13 that died because of the swine flu they call it....I am sick currently,,,upset with the media and all the hysteria this is caused so this poem on this subject peeked my interest.........and this is my honest comment...........interesting and thought provoking write.............
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My condolences and regards, it is sickening, but hopefuly this hysteria will fade in time, medical corporations are under the gun and all are cumulating their efforts to overcome the situation.
be well.
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I'm not sure if you're touching upon the subject of the H1N1 virus strain, although I think you may be. If not, Ill rant anyways about how the common flu kills people that are elderly or extremely young, or not fit at about the rate of 30 000 a year in the United States. The media is hyping up a pandemic because that' what they need. A thought provoking write on your behalf.
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Dear poet I am
And I do side to your ranting about the media, this whole thing could be just what the pharmaceutical companies need, as a medical student myself, I must say that the flu that kills people every year is actually an influenza too, yet not an H1N1 strain.
It does kill people through complications like encephalitis or other overlapping immuno-deficiences, that may eventually compromise the body.
It's still pandemic my friend due worldwide spread, not due severity
unfortunately the condition accompanies its own causalties, people die from this strain as well.
And the vaccine has yet to prove itself.
I hope that symptomatic treatment alone will endure.
be well, and thank you.
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It is a relief to laugh some about this. I'll have to return to comment with more depth. But invite you to enter this in a contest I'm holding which gaurantees meaningful comments without the cost of "For Revision."
Awesomely done. I love the use of form here (as someone incompotent with it, I'm in awe!) -
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My thanks
it's a pleasure to have your critique as well, and I'd gladly join in, in your contest.
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Wow, a very unique idea for a sonnet. Certainly won't find many others on this topic. I would love to know what inspired this, because it's so... Well, forgive me, but the poem seems so sterile/medical/scientific/ that the topic is entirely unpoetic! What I mean by that is, influenza doesn't strike me as something that lends itself to poetry. However you did well with your words, they fit in place nicely, and the vocabulary is fitting
L4 should read "One could"
L8 do you mean "due to variant..."?
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I'd say my medical side had to prevail sometime during poetry, certainly if one is a musician you'll find (if he becomes a poet) that music finds itself in his work too subconsciously or by time.
I only thought of borrowing some medical existence into my poetry which I am trying to develop.
Thanks for pointing the typos out, but L8 was intended this way to keep the meter, if I'd put "to" It'd be compromised, I'd have to change it though if this is grammaticaly incorrect.
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Line 8 can work the way it is, I think.
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