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Wills Weather Together

Her father shouts an age old doubt
and keeps her daughter in
her boyfriend calls and meets his wall
as if he's casting sin

their will is strong and minds do long

for change to happen soon

they choose their path and meet the wrath

as shadows hold the moon

 

when day and night give up the fight

and let the bigots win

more tears will fall when fascists rule

and choice comes down to skin

 

Those kindred hearts shall never part

and time should change this song

for black and white should have the right

to love like nothings wrong

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: This contest is to introduce a new poetic form called 'Inside Out' and was developed by AP's own BluesMan, William J. Reed IV.


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  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    November 16

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    A poem of discrimination and bias that leads to broken hearts and greater seperation between the races. Interesting poem you have crafted here and show nearly true form (check internal rhyme in line 11). Thanks for adding this thoughtful write to this contest.

    Dennis


  • BluesMan gold member
    November 15

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    This poem speaks of the modern day Romeo and Juliette romance persecuted by the bigotry and ignorance that has been bred into a cancerous society that we all live in today. If the passed a law stating that every one in the world must marry some one of a different color, within 100 years the entire world would have beigh skin and no reaqson to hate or discriminate against one another!!!
    Sorry for the rant, but your poem got my color blind bood boiling. lol
    Your rhyme is tight and flowed well. This is a near perfect Triqutrain with the exception of the third line in the third stanza which does not rhyme. I loved it.
    Thank you for entering the contest and sharing your talent.

    Bill

    PS Here's a sugestion for the line in question and a tweek for the following line to make it fit.

    more tears will fall against futilities wall
    when choice comes down to skin


  • Missunderstood165
    November 4
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    Good read!.....and great choice of words....so much imagination and thought put into it......conveys a great image in the readers head....


  • Howl- gold member
    October 28

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    terrific read! i love the overall message. it is truly astonishing that racism still exists in our world. nice rhyme scheme as well.
    thank you for sharing this!


  • JinSays gold member
    October 28

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    no comment on the political agenda, but I really loved the way this caught my attention, and you rhymed this time. I dont see you do that much. you're really good with it.
    excellent poem love.
    jin


  • WaterChild Reborn silver member
    October 27

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    Excellent poem with an excellent message.

    I didn't know that racism was an issue in England. I guess it is just the intrinsic human superiority complex at the root of all bigotry

    We still have major issues with this in some regions of the US, unfortunately. A Louisiana justice of the peace recently got himself in deep when he refused to marry an interracial couple, claiming concern for any children that the union might produce. I wasn't sure whether to laugh or cry! I hope his mommy called him the next morning to explain to him that you don't have to be married to have children.



  • crivanea silver member
    October 26

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    i seldom get to read rhymes from you a good message within this one ..i love the last stanza especially


  • Roseamongweeds
    October 26

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    Aww... Forbidden love between races, it sucks when someone dosen't understand that you love someone, no matter their color.

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