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On the Phone



I'm on the phone
about a loan
that's overgrown
and now I've blown
I moan and groan
and stand alone
dreaming of the great unknown.

No-ones there
but I don't care
I start to swear
and pull my hair
I kick a chair  
and say a prayer
and think about just anywhere.

I scratch my bum
and rub my tum
I start to hum
dee dum dee dum
I chew some gum
will someone come
before my fingers go quite numb.

I start to curse
and write this verse
I see a nurse
who lost her purse
could this get worse
or more perverse
it did, and now I'm in a hearse.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

~~Jury Of Your Peers~~#32

Inspired by a MacDonalds advert currently running in the UK

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Comments

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  • BluesMan gold member
    October 28

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    Ha Ha I really enjoyed reading this silly rhyme and I love the ending. It made me laugh.
    Good luck in the contest.

    Bill


  • IxI
    October 27

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    very nicely written piece about something real we have all been through. the simple word use once again reminds of a childhood poem, relaying to me that feeling i had as a child when i wanted to cross my arms, stamp my feet and just yell "NO...I DONT WANNA!"
    haha good luck in the contest. thanks for the fun read.


  • Genevieve79
    October 26

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    considering I just got off the phone with a bill collector (literally JUST) I related well... and the feeling of everything just snowballing until there is nothing left to do but be dumped in a hole... ugh.... I am so there... anyway good write and interesting poem...


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    October 26

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    Ahh this is what you were looking for It's certainyl a fasrt paced piece and the rhyme is smooth as silk! Best wishes with this craxzy piece But it fits the pace wonderfully.


  • michael thomas
    October 26
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    creative poem.


  • Melee Vau gold member
    October 26

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    yep those call centres, you can literally die waiting (well maybe just figuratively)- enjoyed this fun read that most readers could relate to.


  • islekine gold member
    October 26

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    LOL

    I enjoyed this! Quite the rhyme scheme! and story!
    Thanks for sharing your talent! Best wishes in the contest and always!
    Write on and on...

    and

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