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Lucky Leaf

Missing image

Clinging to big Maple's gentle old arm
in golden-red I am all a-flutter
Wondering if this autumn's gales, anger
will blow me into life's gutter


As family blanket's each of earths lawns
raked burned, kicked in frolic's play
She still hasn't released me cause
in fright I be blown away


Lucky me still hanging around; while
everyone else covers the ground

Author notes

Prompt: Floating On Whispers Of Yesterday's Promise

Autumn Leaves" by Michael G.O'Callaghan


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  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    November 16

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    I love how you personified the leaf in this write.
    Wonderful work with this prompt here!
    Good luck to you and thanks for your entry.




    Jeremy0826


  • tomisb
    October 27

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    Nice tale of the trembling last leaf. Much we can hear about ourselves in its pangs of fear and grief.
    Love,
    Tom B.

  • sharon duveau
    October 26

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    I like the symbolism at the end and the rhythem is very good.


  • semisane
    October 26

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    I really like this. It seems kind of playful. I like the last two lines, for how they're worded and also for how it flows. Good job ^,..,^


  • Denerica silver member
    October 26

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    This is unique imagery...to write from a leaf's perspective of still there while others have fallen to the ground. I like the line Clinging to the Big Maple's arm, clever thought. Beautifully captured image. Excellent. Blessings.

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