Dear Mister God,
(or To Whom It Concerns)
Don't you find it kind of odd,
The way the world turns?
You mustn't have thought clearly,
when you made all of this.
Signed most sincerely,
your dearest Anonymous.
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A contest entry
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While questioning, it does not live up to the hype in the shameless box. I found it a bit amusing, but not really funny. Clever? Not really.
It is well constructed. The flow is good. It is succinct, as promised.
Thank you for sharing.
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i love it!
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Thank you very much! The gold is much appreciated!
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I like it, short, simple, to the point. I have to say I've wondered the same thing, many a time. Its an interesting subject to ponder. Thanks for writing, QS
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This really made me smile. But don't you think, He has made everything perfect? I don't think its odd, really. Because, everything is related to eachother and there is interdependence which is a great boon. It teaches us what brotherhood is and how it does. He has given us a lot of gifts and I think it is our problem that we don't realize these. we've got eyes but we still miss things. They are so awfully close yet we ignore it. Men are hard-hearted. that is the reason why they forget to appreciate what one has and complain about what they don't have. Good poem. Different and witty.
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The poem is more of a tongue-in-cheek way of pointing out the problems of the world and giving blame as an Anonymous person and even questioning God's existence, and yet "hiding" from the potential existence of God by remaining Anonymous. I'm actually Buddhist, so none of the views in this poem really apply literally to me. Thanks for reading!
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hahahahaha this is witty and made me smile
reread it to make sure i got it all, turns out i didnt haha, well it is late at night
you are an intelligent and funny poet not to mention talented
thankyou for entering this contest and goodluck
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Thank you! I'm glad you got a smile out of it.
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Very entertaining - as much in what it sparks in the reader as in itself! Thank you.
Mike -
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Thanks, Mike! I'm glad you liked it!
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wow thats really good
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I really like this one!
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this is a wonderful write. i loved the rhyme. and i love how many questions you could ask from this piece. "Don't you find it kind of odd, The way the world turns?" brilliant. fantastic job! keep up the good work and continue on writing!
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I love this, because of the idea of being anonymous to God among the rest of its simple brilliance. A truly great write!
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Dear Human
(or To Whom It Concerns)
Typical male, ignores the directions that should have been apparent from step one page A. HANDLE WITH CARE - FRAGILE
And too, if you see it behaving wrongly, why do you not stop it, and try it a different way. Your all doing it wrong.
PPFFFTTTT
Signed most sincerely
Mizz God
(smiling...nice pen)
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Dear Mizz God
I'd have got it right it hadn't been for the distraction caused by that confounded woman you sent!
Can I have one who talks less and does more?
Sincerely, Mere Man
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WOAH.
I clicked on this thinking that it'd be about a million pages long explaining everything...
8 lines of brilliance. Wow. Kudos to you.
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Wow, I can relate to this. God is supposed to be perfect, so then why is the world he created the exact opposite? Why? This is one of the many reasons why I lost my faith. I couldnt see the point anymore. Great write by the way, 3 hugging smiley thingys for you.
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