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Hold the Love

A double dose of pain to go.
An extra large serving of hurt.
Can I get a dozen heart brakes too?
A tall glass of blood and tears.
An extra shot of pain,
And two broken bones.
Then add a nice amount,
Of near death experience,
Hold the love.

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  • Bitter Sweetest
    November 24, 2009

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    Nice, very creative. line 3 brakes is breaks. I'll take a sweet embrace, a caring heart, ears that hear and care, and alot of love. Please!


  • vampireintherain
    November 3, 2009
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    very interesting, I like it! Good job

  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 26, 2009

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    A pain buffet..very unigue and very poignant..you may have a new twist in writing with this piece..serving up darkness and pain..neat
    Take care
    David


  • songstress80
    October 25, 2009

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    interesting...it's like an afterlife restaurant order. very funny dry sarcasm is sometimes the best emotion to read about. almost makes you think like the person here is saying "hold the mayo". i like it! an excellent write! glad to have you as a favorite. keep on writing! also glad to have the opportunity and priveledge to be the first to comment on this piece.