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Take My Hand

I see you,
And you see me.
I wave and you walk away.
You get in your car and drive.
Confused,
I run after you.
Why are you leaving?
As you drive out of the lot,
I stop and stare.
Why?
I see break lights as a sharp pain surges through my body.
Car tiers squeal,
Horns blare,
Darkness overcomes me as I hit the ground.
I wake to find myself in a white room.
Your sitting next to me.
I cant breath,
I cant speak.
I reach out for you.
You start to take my hand,
Then turn a way.
No tears fall from your brown eyes as you walk out of the room,
The sad note of death follows.

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  • ParadoxVictory85
    November 7
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    Well written.


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 26

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    This is very sad piece
    Many raw emotions pours from this piece
    I hope that writing help to ease your pains
    People can be very cruel..sometimes the little thinks like "silence" and walking away cuts deeper than other cruelties..
    Take care
    David