Gentle caress as she'll undress
placing fingers here and there
Wondrous heat a passionate treat
trickling down skin so bare
Caramel skin and twinkling eyes
a native from the islands
Valleys are wet with no regret
as soft lips seek the highlands
Fingers explore a little more
the flower of sensual sin
A genuine smile thats her style
to lure the tourist in
Drinking the fruit he plays his debut
and showers her with loves oil
With rum kissed lips and curvy hips
on the sands of bliss they'll coil
Author notes
The form called for no syllable count/meter, so I went with a
8/7/8/7 syllable count for each stanza. (just being me, different 
)
The form is as follows:
“Inside Out Form”
In each stanza lines one and three have a double rhyme
In stanzas two and four they share the same end line rhyme
Line 1 AA (Internal rhymes with end line)
Line 2 B (End line rhymes with line 4 end line)
Line 3 CC (Internal rhymes with end line)
Line 4 B (End line rhymes with line 2 end line)
Line 5 DD (Internal rhymes with end line)
Line 6 E (End line rhymes with line 4 end line)
Line 7 FF (Internal rhymes with end line)
Line 8 E (End line rhymes with line 2 end line)
Line 9 GG (Internal rhymes with end line)
Line 10 H (End line rhymes with line 4 end line)
Line 11 I I (Internal rhymes with end line)
Line 12 H (End line rhymes with line 2 end line)
Line 13 JJ (Internal rhymes with end line)
Line 14 K (End line rhymes with line 4 end line)
Line 15LL (Internal rhymes with end line)
Line 16 K (End line rhymes with line 2 end line)
A contest entry
- Big Point Contest Challenge for a Poetic Form by Haiku-bless-you.
2100 points, ended November 16, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please Comment If You Read
Comments
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Good sensual content makes this poem an interesting read, you paint a lovely word picture. Somehow you have missed the internal rhyme (on lines 5 & 13) which is required in this poetic form. Thanks for your entry.
Dennis
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WOW I think I need to turn on the air condtioner to cool things down after reading this smoking hot poem of desire! This is a near perfect Triqutrain. The rhymes are spot on and flow effortlessly off the tongue when read out loud, with the exception of the first line of the second qutrain which does not rhyme. I loved it.
Thank you for entering the contest and sharing your talent.
Bill
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i lost my sensual voice, but if i keep reading your work i think i will find it again, all i got to say now, is keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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A lovely sensual write in one of the oldest of all rhyme schemes
Delicious poetry in so many ways
Love it
Love
Jeff
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I bookmarked this contest earlier
but my brain is mush right now
This is a lovely take on the form
Soft sensuality of these piece is amazing
I love the entire piece
In particular, the last stanza rocks
Brilliant job
I may have to try this form as well
You are an inspiration
Wish you the best of luck
Much love my friend
David
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mother! 
lol i loved it, this was beautiful!! I loved the flow, and the rhyme was flawless! love you bunches
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I took a look at this contest and wondered if you would try it since it was posted in the group. I figured you would. Now you're gonna make it so I have to try to beat you huh?
Excellently done as usual sweetheart. I love you... Scott 
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A most well done visual trip through Passions lusts, hot flavors and , as usual, an immediate mastery of a new poetic form. I am more than just a little impressed here gal, certainly not a poem any man could ever "recoil" from huh?
love ya bunches
JohnnyD
Len
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