Are you lonely?
Is your heart aching?
Do you stay awake at night?
Do you miss me?
I am lonely for you.
My heart feels like it is breaking.
I haven't slept in over a week.
I miss you so much.
It is not either of our fault,
We didn't ask to fall in love.
It is something that just happened.
I don't regret it.
The day will come for us soon.
Your lips will touch my lips.
You will hold me in your arms.
We shall never again be apart.
Many miles keep us apart.
Within my heart you are so close
Our love for each other keeps us strong.
For we are each others destiny.
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Yes!
I would give it an A+ now without hesitation and I have to say I love it! -
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I can tell you miss him. I love how you ask him questions in the first stanza, then answer them in the second.
I know how missing someone feels.
The only line I do not love is 'We just need to be patient'. Perhaps change that to something else you will do-- you have lips, arms- now find me a line that will really sing, and this will be a great poem instead of just a really really good one!
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I changed that line. CAn you tell me if it is any better now?
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A love poem. I like it. You so seldom write of love. It is refreshing to read your thoughts of love. And yes, be patient and he will be in your arms. Just give it time.
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