I remember the days when the sun weeded out the weak and left the two of us remaining drenched in swear with scalded skin and nothing left to disrupt the silent conversations our eyes were having while our mouths did the same. Breathing was difficult when the sweet taste of you lined up to taunt my eager taste buds, making the oxygen stop short in my throat. There were seconds where I wanted to just take a moment to bask in the moment, but my unhealthy addiction could only keep me glued to your lips.
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You passed me a cigarette while the sun began to scorch the horizon, the colorful splashes in the sky reminding me of the fireworks display you had set up a few moments before. Your hand laid peacefully on top of mine, your sweaty palms boldly remaining despite my efforts to unsecure it. You smiled at my weak efforts, which created delicate crinkles next to your eyes, displaying our many moments together.
Oh, how I loved to see you smile.
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I walked through our field the other day. The one that used to be alive. My feet mercilessly crushed the withered sunflower heads that used to sway with us in the breeze, elated to be blessed with life. It didn't take me long to locate our lost joyous spot together. It wasn't the endless scattering of cigarette stubs or the tire tracks from the van that made the crushing realization hit me so powerfully.
It was the feeling of knowing that I lost you.
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Author notes
prompt: 12. June- Summer
I know this probably doesn't seem clearly about summer, but it is 
This was actually written for another contest a LONG time ago and it had to have a specific amount of words. Obviously I had too many 
A contest entry
- Give me everything you got! by thelamb01.
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amazing!
very vivid.. i could see every thing happen in slow motion.. the descriptions are great.. you're a wonderful writer! >_<
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you guys are much too nice :] thank you so much !
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This was reallly great, I mean this made me reminisce about lost people and lovers...it was kinda sad, but you did a hell of a job painting a picture with your words in this poem 
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wow
here imagery was the forte of this peom and it made me vision quite a bit. I loved the flow of this poem just too much. i ran down his one twice and found it new read each time. Hun pls visit me and read me. keep the ink flowing -
Ah, this brings back memories. You really hit close to home.
The imagery was very detailed.
Love it. Absolutely love it.
Splendid piece. ♥
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never ever stop writing :)
i love the title for starters. its so contrasting. and creative to me.
i could go on and on about what I love in this write, but that will take to long. so i'll just say... I loved this.
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why thank you ! i appreciate it ^_^
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Great poem! And yes, we go back to the spots where we lost our love. It's terrible, but the yearning to go back gets stronger...
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thank you !
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So beautifully penned
the image of your thoughts shined, the scene set as in table and chairs, flowers and fields... so perfect and detailed
That hot summer sizzling
a brilliant poem
best wishes
Julie
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thank you so much !
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oh mannn that last line hurts.
how I miss summer and everything it stood for. -sigh-
the imagery in this is beautifull. I looove this.
goodluck and thanks for entering
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thank youu
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