we counted backwards and stole stars from sunny sky
as the merry-go-around spun counterclockwise--
a year was a long time to wait
we carried umbrellas and watched snowflakes melt
as the duet between spring and winter ended--
2 years since your last postcard
we caught fireflies and flew with lost Monarchs
as the soundless symphony came to a closure--
3 was never the magic number
Author notes
prompt: 3 years
A contest entry
- Quick! ie! by Not-The-Sun.
800 points, ended October 26, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
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So very well deserving of the shiny!!!
Just wonderful buddy.
Ken
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Took the prompt
and ran into a silver trophy. Deserved by the way. Good write and Congrats
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So nicely spoken sis!
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love your creativity with using 1,2, then 3 years; I'd love to point out every part about this but I don't want to recite your whole poem here >.< I'll use line numbers
lol
L1 and L2 are increddddible : )
and i love the connection between snowflakes and a change in seasons in the second stanza, and in the last stanza i love the use of "lost Monarchs / as the soundless symphony came to a closure"
that last bit I mentioned has SOOOO much to it. the way you haven't heard from the other person in a long time, making it soundless, or the way love can be silent when your'e not with that one person; just... so many things.
great work!
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i really love this. the use of the one year, two year, three year in each stanza. and the concept of there being stars in a sunny sky.
amazing job. <3
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this is my favorite. good luck!
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beautifully sad. best wishes. x
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This is so sad and beautiful.
I love it. 
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this is so sad, but i love it. it was so deep..and like it kinda expresses how i feel wonderful write, and good luck though you already kicked my ass.lol
Stephanie ♥
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