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Thoughts on imagination

At times, I close my eyes
and try to use

my imagination.

What do I want?
                  What makes me happy?
                                      What world would I like to live in?

                                              up,
But,    too soon,    time  is

And I must return to

my reality.

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Just a random few lines. It's crappy, but it gets the point across, I figure.

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  • tjayrush gold member
    October 25, 2009

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    I like the physical shape of this poem. Particularly the last three lines where imagination has to shrink itself back into reality like going down a funnel. I don't know if you need the extra blank lines though. More like this:

    up,
    But, too soon, time is
    And I must return to
    my reality.

    So it goes down the funnel quicker. Just my two cents. Nice poem.