Light as a feather
is what I wish to be
nothing more or less
just to be happy.
Not being comfortable
with what I am
is harder for me than
people can understand
Its so hard to look
in the mirror and hate
myself whenever I put
on a little bit of weight.
I wish to disappear
I dont want to be me
and light as a feather
is what I wish to be.
A contest entry
- Multiple Prompts by Redneck626.
700 points, ended November 19, 20 entries
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I dont know why I wrote this Its how I feel right now....:'( hope its okay for the contest x its really shit im sorry everyone.. x
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Nice job! I love the flow of this and the way you use rhyme, Everything just ties back into the beginning at your ending and its easy to read. Great job! Please, keep writing!
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Wow! this is heartfelt, the poem shows the emotions that your struggling with, "light as a feather, is what i wish to be" the repetition of this line really instills the emotions at the beginning and the end. a very well written piece, great work!
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It's really good. You know being skinny isn't everything, being happy with who you are is what really counts. If you need me, i'm here.
~Edna~
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aww hun this is really sad, i know you want to be like that but i do believe you are and im always here for you, good luck and its not shit; its brilliant and keep writing, i love it, great job!
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Awe this is so heartfelt. Very sad though. Hun you don't want to make yourself too skinny. That wouldn't be good for you that can send you the hospital and you can end up being hospitalize and die if you don't eat enough. You don't got to be fat or anything but you got to atleast weight 100 pounds. I am in danger right now because I am below the 100's. So I know how you feel. 100's pounds isn't a lot. it is as light as a feather
Great write. You expressed yourself clearly and well.
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No its not *buuny* its pretty good and you put all your feelings in it.
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