I live for you, I'd die for you
honey don't you know
my world revolves solely
around only you
but I can't find
a logical reason to explain
these things you do
which make me insane
the late nights
gambling and boozing
I feel like I am losing
you say you love me
yet still texting miss double "D"
baby can't you see
this makes you look so guilty
She said... I feel like I am losing
He said...
Oh baby, you sing the same ole song
but you're out of tune and it's all wrong
it is I who is thinking that I'm losing
from years of watching YOU do the boozing
I've been a very loyal loving spouse
I don't even attempt to leave this house
my duties now are caring only for you
because you no longer for yourself can do
there is no texting miss double "D"
I'm not sneaking and there is no mystery
my bride, it is a calculator that you see
working at home as an accountant and I'm not guilty
there is one thing that you did get right
that is the gambling that I do each night
I count on luck each time I go to bed
that I wake in the morn and not find myself dead
I take that chance because I do not dare
to waste one moment that we have to share
even though it means to tolerate your boozing
but my dear... I think we both might be losing
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Author notes
substance abuse will make people do and say things that are irrational... just as love will sometimes make people do and act in ways that they might otherwise not behave... when the two are within the same relationship, the outcome can and often times will become toxic. I realize this poem is a far stretch from what normally happens, but I preferred to leave the brutality aside, hopefully the point still comes across.
Please tell me what you think
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Oh My~
Powerful piece this is Beautiful~
this swelled the eyes while I was reading...
Message tugs hard and especially with Author's Notes
Tight rhyme with flow that took me there~
sniffle~ sniffle...
while I was reading~ kept getting reference to
paranoid...like when the person is under the influence...
that paranoid feeling and making accusations that are
outrageous~ what damage it can do
You bring much to Light my Friend!
Keep that quill dancing
Sorry it has taken me awhile to visit Your doorstep,
I didn't see new pieces pop up...
Thank You for sharing Your Voice
Best wishes in all You do Precious One~
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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Very well done, thank you for this fine entry.
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Great view of dependency and deception
Suzi,
This is really good. I like the dialogue and the way you describe the emotional rollercoaster, the bondage and the deception that are interwoven. I can't think of any way you could improve this write. It is disturbing but that is a great sign that it works. Keep up the good work!
Jack
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I have such mixed feeling about this write,
I struggled with loving someone who had dependency
on drugs and alcohol both where a loosing battle
and in the end he lost.
well written with so much truth!!
love and blessings
Rend
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I liked how you brought out that people who are substance abusers are often irrational and believe the things they suspece as being fact. Often too, where one drinks, their spouse soon follows. It's just so easy to do. You touch on many of the hurts and harms of substance abuse, and for all that you say, there is volumes more that could be said. Too much to cover in one poem. Rose.
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I keep reading and rereading this. it is just so dang GOOOD!! If you would read one of my poems and give me some advice if you can, I'd be forever grateful!
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You set the scene and brought out a very good message here. Very good write.
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Powerful
I think you gave the subject such an intense and well crafted approach. you did great with the way you expressed it. Best of luck in the contest
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Oh my god. This is the best poem I have read on here so far! I love how it so easily flows, and that I dont get distracted by words that I dont have a complete understanding of. You, ma'am, are a great writer. I shall now go read some more of your poems!!!!
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