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prelude to winter

he was the sunbeam that baked
golden tan bikini lines on her virgin skin.

but their fingers no longer interlaced.


and a chill ran the length of her spine;
leaving goosebumps on perspired skin.

it's the changing of seasons.

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prelude to winter
no other title seemed to fit the poem as accurate as this.

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  • Irish-rain
    November 19

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    nice.

    i got a different type of feeling from this. Like two people holding each other every night. the warmth of their bodies, their love, and lust, then to be seperated and not have that warmth there any more.


  • myrataal silver member
    November 11
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    Congratulations on this Silver.

    And yes: the title is apt.
    Love
    Myra


  • crivanea silver member
    November 10

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    beautiful...in imagery..in voice..and in the fact that you took this in a non nature direction..

    creativity: 5/5
    imagery: 4/5
    diction: 5/5
    impact: 7/10

    Total: 21/25


  • darell
    November 4

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    Mmmm

    enchantment inside the intimate realms
    of gentle and passionate desire.
    An odyssey of seduction and Romance.
    Charming my dear. Lovely


  • Mango Memories gold member
    October 31
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    shit shit shit! THIS is good.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    October 26

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    ~~
    he was the sunbeam that baked
    golden tan bikini lines on her virgin skin.~~~
    Oh such imagery. i want to be a sunbeam..

    You write in awesome ways.


    Joe

  • sleepinglion
    October 25
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    Beautiful words, so expressive,
    David


  • Cannonsfire
    October 25

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    Ah yes sistah, the fading reminders of summer...until next year C


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    October 25

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    I like the title. Well writ & oh so sad.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 25

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    excellent

    descriptive piece for a change of season..not that i'm surprised, but this is amazing..


  • Nom de Plume
    October 25

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    love the correlation between the seasons and relationship, from the scorching summer of passion to the dreary winter of discontent... but still written with your soft touch, opening stanza my fav

  • Bob Fox
    October 25

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    My

    Never before have I looked at the change of seasons like this. Perhaps one last run to the beach before the first snow fall. But truly ,a very delicate piece of poetry.


    • Girl-Interrupted gold member
      October 25

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      thanks so much for reading bob.... and running on the beach before the first snow fall would be refreshening !

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