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Undone

Missing image

A pearled hush on the edge of liquid clouds,

baptised In tranquil tides of rain

Emotions..frozen In a glance

blending Into haunted shades..

 

I lay undone..

Orated In unstifled cries exposed,

to taste the fire within the burn, unleashed

In jeweled caress

Travel Into a place where time

stood still, save for moonlight whispers

 

I lay undone..

Fire In the heart, fire In the belly

Warmth, drifting over skin, silky, sleek

and feather-like, listening to echoing

heartbeats manacled In silver links

of moonlight...My love..share that ache,

that ache that slips between breath

and heartbeat

 

I lay undone..

Feeling the soul you paint within my eyes,

the tiny fireflies playing on fingertips like

strands of silk seduction

The hush of satin winds sifting rain through

patchwork clouds

Secret thunder, moistened with sighs

Tantric breath caressing the hollow of

arched need, saturated In opal mists

 

~Scented sweet~  WE.. lay undone.

 

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  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    November 4

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    There is much brilliance in this write
    your stunning word choice paints a vivid imagery..this piece defines sensuality..the tone is lovely and it's simply breath-taking
    I doubt you need this but I wish you the best of luck
    Thanks for sharing your gifted talent..David


  • Sheli silver member
    October 27

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    WOW!

    i will keel over in shock if this doesn't win! OMG! i was thinking to enter, but you have so nailed it! good lord this is sizzling!


  • PurringKitten silver member
    October 26

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    SIMPLE BREATH TAKING

    your words flow like a sweet red wine across a heat tongue waiting for that certain moment when it will exsplode into pure rapture...sighs...sighs...a master piece of pure love you have penned and im honored to read...thank you kindly for sharing it with us and for entering


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 25

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    first of all this is beautiful!
    I am always blessed when I read your
    work, I just had to put this one in my list
    of goodies, the gift that keeps on giving!!

    just simply lovely!!

    Rend


    • Deceits Tears silver member
      October 25
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      As always you are so very kind, I appreciate your continued support
      Be Well


  • redmoonnrizing silver member
    October 25

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    Your words flow so effortlessly within this piece...you are defiantly the Queen of Sensuality...lol...I love your writings...they have that yummy "sigh" factor that
    makes for wishful thinking


    • Deceits Tears silver member
      October 25
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      Wishful thinkin is about all I got Lol....thankyou so much for your continued support


  • twelfthknight silver member
    October 25

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    This is wonderful Its so beautiful and it reads like silk, how do you create such fantastic imagery? Id love to know where you go when you write. it must be a magical place my favourite lines were

    to taste the fire within the burn, unleashed

    In jeweled caress


    Best of luck in the contest I'm sure you will do well with this

  • Nice job on this one. Great imagery. The colors and textures that you write about give a great insight into the emotions you express.

    Mike


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 25

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    holy smokers!

    this piece got me UNDONE, unraveled, n unbelieveably steamed up..l.o.l. wow.. what a sensual, beautiful piece..whew..goodness i need water!

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