Solo black bird soars over gleaming jewels.
Breath catches as time’s passage within soul slows.
Memories live of wings set free unconstrained
and glorious attempts like water to flow.
A giddy child inside skips in excited glee.
Toy soldier to-do lists parade the desk’s grounds.
Winter clothes negotiate terms of release
from boxed plastic prisons within too long bound.
Inner spirit commences pre-flight checklist.
Retrieves incandescent glow of soaring glides
that trace the lines of fear’s steep face alive with
wings that yearn to stretch and soar on mountain’s side.
A contest entry
- Prompt 121 by crivanea.
700 points, ended November 10, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Winter Re-Actions by misticmoonlite.
875 points, ended November 16, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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this poem speaks volumes of wintrys fun and sports, serene scenery indeed, thank you for joining in, good luck
Linda
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Serene, tranquil...bringing out memories of ages past to the present ones we would make. A delight. Excellent. Blessings.
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I maybe a 'grown-up' in age, but I am still
a child inside. Snow brings my inner
child to the surface so quickly! I love to
play in the snow, and your poem says
that to me. Wonderfully written.
Thank you for sharing and for the
excitement!
~Jeannie
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i love this...it is beautiful in flow and in form...but it did not followed the rules "no rhymes" usually i'm not a rule stickler..but too many outstanding entries in this contest for me to not be...again..the poem itself is beautiful..i thank you for taking the time to write it for the contest
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Rats, sorry I missed that point! Even though its excluded would very much appreciate if you have time to apply your rubric. If not, no worries! There will be future contests!
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The sense of anticipation is palpable in this well-worded poem. There are some lovely lines and imagery - I particularly like "inner spirit commences pre-flight checklist."
Bill
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