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Thinking inside the box (it's pretty in there)

Mia the magnetar whirling like a top,
with her magnesium words intensely bright,
collapses on thoughts that move my mind -
sweetly.

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If you don't know the awesomeness that is you'll have to follow the link
http://allpoetry.com/MusicBoxMetaphor

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  • MusicBoxMetaphor
    October 25

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    I just supernova-ed!
    Apparently this consists of giggles, turning pink, and (obviously) luminously exploding.

    Multiply the applause by a stellar storm and that's what you caused:


  • Afe-la
    October 25
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    Aww, it makes me all warm and mooshy inside. I'm not sure if it's a comfort or i need a crap. Either way, it seems nice, and I can always leave it in a corner somewhere.

    • Kastor
      October 25
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      Ha! I get it, you swooned a little and it sparked a homophobic reaction.
      Thanks! I hope she likes it at least as much as you did.

      • Afe-la
        October 25

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        Aww, and now it's even prettier! I think i'm in love with my homophobic reaction. An it definately smells like crap. Not the poem, the head poking out.
        I'm swooning all over the carpet.

        • Kastor
          October 25

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          Is this your way of telling me you ripped your gym shorts again? I don't see how she'll like it more than you now!


          • Afe-la
            October 25
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            Oh i'm sure there'll be a lot more than swoon left on the carpet.

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