We've had our dinner
two cocktails each
one with lemon peel
one with olive
it's time for music
maybe a dance
the music begins:
I motion with my eyes
to the carpet dance floor
she takes my hand
and we start in classic pose
arms up
her on her toes
just as we always slow dance
can't get any closer
holding her
we don't move to the music
I can't move
"My funny valentine
sweet comic valentine
you make me smile with your heart"
she pulls back
and looks at me
wondering why we're not moving
I just smile
and nod my head
she doesn't know what I'm doing
"your looks are laughable
unphotograghable
yet you're my favorite work of art"
I laugh a little harder
still holding her waist
her eyes soften
she knows me
"is your figure less than Greek
is your mouth a little weak
when you open it to speak
are you smart"
I'm not smiling now
I gently touch the side of her mouth
she's getting the idea now
knows how I love the touch of her
I move her
so that her back is against the wall
I whisper in her ear
I should nail you right here and now
"but dont change a hair for me
not if you care for me
stay little Valentine stay
each day is Valentines Day"
I look into her eyes
and brush her hair
we get close again
she feels something wet
the best is yet to come
it's always Valentines Day
Author notes
I've always loved My Funny Valentine and this is what is what I thought about never dreaming that it would be a poem.
A contest entry
- Be Brave by Everlasting Ellen.
800 points, ended November 18, 32 entries
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Comments
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Very very very very romantic! but could you tell me which prompt you chose?
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cocktail with olive --> ewww LOL
I can sense the beats of the music as two lovers dance! Great poem
xx
DD xx
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This poem is very sensual indeed and your words have allowed images to be produced that are quite vivid and so real. Your tender way of handling this was really special and showed so much feeling and emotion that sometimes does not come from a lot of poems. This one certainly held everything. That is one beautiful song and how you managed to combine it with your words and create such an excellent piece was amazing. There was a slight lilting feel to this, one of peace and one that made me think that the words were whispered rather than spoken. Glorious and one worth bookmarking.
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This is very sweet and nostalgic. I think my parents used to sing this.
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this makes me smile, and dance on...
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Nice lil twist to an old evergreen, I like the end, has a great climax...!
I kinda like doing this myself it's fun...have a look at 'Rocky Mountain Sweetheart' (John Denver's Rocky Mountain Suite!) if you like...
Cheers
John
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I love the way you have woven the song and the poem together to create this and it certainly is sensual and romantic, a great read
All the best in the contest
Sue
x
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Hmmm - don't know quite what to say, so I'll just leave you with this:
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Dancing with a smile.. You sly dog you..
Very good poem on that song.
Best of luck.
Joe
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You're a romantic Charles! I love this poem and the memories you stirred to life in this reader. You have quite a way with the ladies I think! (I'm taking notes!).
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