You see these tears?
they are not real,
nothing can bring me down
i am the castle wall that does not fall
when seiges by the tides of sarrow,
but how is it,
when i met you,
i broke?
I became the fragile being
i never knew i was,
the angel torn
from the sky
by broken wings?
My wall has crumbled,
my wings ripped away,
all i have to lean on is you,
but what will i do,
when you go too?
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Written April 12th, 2004
A contest entry
- What makes you able to go on? by Dark Shadow.
700 points, ended April 14, 2004, 15 entries
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A deeply moving poem, that shows such a fall from being on the top of the world to falling into the deapths of complete helplessness. This is a very well written piece. Great write and best of wishes...~genielassie~
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Great job on this write! Thats how I felt before I fell in love and had my heart broken. I always thought " I used to be confident and strong but what will happen when you go?" Well he went and here I am still building up that wall once again even though I have found another who won't leave me. This is an amzing write, full of emotion ( again ) and talent. Kudos to you, and keep writing! wow...
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Oh wow. This was really well written. It was so beautiful. fantastic write.
love,
Victoria
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