night at the lake
watching minnows rise
to nibble the moon...
as hungers find
the light upon her skin
Author notes
just for the joy- not for judging
In a list
A contest entry
- help me celebrate my one year anniversary-Far Eastern Poetry Forms by Draig aine.
3250 points, ended November 3, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful the way this word painting reflects upon both risings and fallings...dual images juxtaposed so delicately. This is just a lovely, evocative poem.
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Thank you Ten-
I had some helpful edits to get to where it is...
, I dont write much in this form but I enjoy it...Thanks for all...PK 
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this is so very beautiful...loved the soft fingers of moon on skin here. wonderful tanka!
` Nicolette
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Thank you Nicolette-
I feel sometimes that we can have feelings that reflect what we see, when we let ourselves see the beauty around us...there is simply so much beauty around us...thanks...PK
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Amashing write!!!
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What a scene you've created, peaceful, and yes, beautiful...
sigh.
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Thank you Rowan-
Yes, for me too ...the feeling of an experience...PK
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I really like the picture you have with the upper verse, very creative and lovely
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Thank you Mari~
I liked your thoughts on this one, the edits worked really well, thanks for all...h 
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your brief thoughts ...
set the scene well and the silence in between adds to the charm of it all! j
y
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sounds like a perect evening, ah that is what I love here, no cities the moon and stars dance in the dark dark night
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Thank you...and Happy AP Anniversary...PK
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