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evening...

a wisp of smoke
over the old man's table

a candle's last hiss...

fills the room,
in glows of setting sun


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  • Rowan gold member
    October 25
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    What an image, PK, fills my head with the soft amber.


  • gaze
    October 25

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    This has a nice set up of upper and lower verses.
    I enjoyed to see how the upper verse worked so well on its own. It has that haiku feel and that is what makes a tanka read well.
    Nicely done H


  • Draig aine gold member
    October 24
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    oh tanka , my most favored form done here in fine fettle!


  • Cannonsfire
    October 24

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    serenely beautiful my friend C