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distance

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thunder rumbles
in the distance
a reminder
that your voice
is too far away

imaginary friends
play and sort
through their blocks
debating whether
to share or keep
to themselves

rain has started
to splash down
big fat splotches
against my window
i look out and pretend
i'm waiting for you

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Author notes

it's raining men!

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  • Nicolette gold member
    October 26

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    i love this...my own thoughts splashed onto this page through your pen. it's raining here...stormwinds of 100km per hour. so yes, i felt this one

    ~ Nicolette

  • piggyback
    October 24

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    beautiful rain imagery and I love how it connects to the distance - I relate...


    • natari gold member
      October 25
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      Thanks piggyback I appreciate your comments.