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We all look the same in the dark

So I down another drink,
Do quick,
It's easy now,
Done it so many times,
I spin,
I feel as light as the air, 
Arms round me, 2? 4? and many more.
I fly through the air,
I feel lips touch my skin,
I down another drink,
I laugh,
I dance,
I fly,
I kiss,
I move away,
I come back again,
I down another drink,
I'm pulled and pushed in all directions,
But I don't care,
I'm free!
I shake your way,
I kiss your lips,
I spin to the music,
I step towards you again,
I down another drink,
your hair longer?
Eyes a different colour?
Taller?
Shorter?
I down another drink,
In the end it doesn't matter,
We all look the same in the dark.

Author notes

yeah...i went out last night, i got very drunk, this is basically about my night, and how my nights are very similar. which in away, i can see people looking down on me for, but (1) I dont plan to stay this way (2) i alos dont care what people think all that much.

where could i change it for the better?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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