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Breaking Through the Love I Knew

I plunge with greatness into your love,
Holding my breath as if never to let go.
So unworthy I feel to be finally with you
And breathless to believe that you are mine.
You say what you always feel
And I reply with unbounding truth.
If who we are becomes what we see,
Then I believe my world is right.

How breathlessly I feel like flying so far
To be with you forever, right when I breathe.
If I hadn't met you, my world would be wrong
Because you and I were born to be one.
I'll sing to you and you can breathe for me
As long as I love you I will never see
The ones that could hurt me so easily
And the ones that I liked so briefly.

Be truthful and lovable, just what you are.
If you look up you will see our star.
Without trouble my love comes so fast,
But furthermore, you admit it too.
Now believe what I say and trust what I do,
Since, finally, I can be with you.
I will promise to never let go
If you can declare you will never say no.

I love you for the way that you're so strong
And you are different from all of the rest.
I love the way you believe in me
And helped me before there was an us.
But here, you said it, could it be true?
If I were the first to say it to you,
And we are at last washed anew,
Then yes, my darling, I love you too.

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  • Sonya-Erasmus silver member
    November 7

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    Oh this is wonderful.
    Great write!
    I love the lines
    'I'll sing to you and you can breathe for me
    As long as I love you I will never see'

    Love
    Sonya


  • TecumsehRoz
    October 25

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    So Sweet.

    It brought tears of joy to my eyes. How lovely it must be to feel like this. Lovely write and absolutely stunning imagery.


  • Inconspicuous.
    October 24

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    I'm speechless. This write is so awe inspiring and beautiful. I love the way you did the rhyme scheme here. And every line is laced with pure love. I can feel the emotion bubbling within myself, as you have penned what I am feeling. I don't think that anything could be more exact. And not to sound repetitive, but your piece really did make me feel the knee shaking, tongue tying love, that i'm already experiencing, on a much higher level. Thank you and best of luck in my contest.

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