a moth
plays with a lamp
round and round
dance in my head
thoughts of you
Author notes
Happy 1st AP anniversary!
A contest entry
- help me celebrate my one year anniversary-Far Eastern Poetry Forms by Draig aine.
3250 points, ended November 3, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I don't know if we should wish people a blessing for their AP anniversaries or offer our condolences. I like moths because they like fire. FIRE...
I need to bake cookies for my kids Parent/Teacher meeting and there's a little thing I need to take care of down in the city. Do you have any matches and gasoline?
Flora Burns, PyroMom.
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excellent write ... the image of the moth chasing around light as we do with our thoughts. wonderful.
good luck in the contest.
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oh well done , your words dance in my mind
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The pivot dances around in my mind too, wonderful blending of ideas and images here, the essence of tanka the balance...so wonderfully done here...h
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i love this...wonderful metaphor, thoughts around the bright light source & warmth of a lover.
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Far Eastern? That must be all the way to Ellsworth, Maine!
I always wonder when a poem is enigmatic in tone, what I mean is...is the dance one of pleasure or signifying the American saying "You're giving me the run around."
And have so often shied away from such poems over the years for fear that they might be the negative thus be about me, lol I'm glad I don't have that conflict here and can just comment off the top of my head without worrying about repercussions.
It's good to say things about poems that I once dared not ask about.
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