How is they get to splatter with grace
as I hit the ground with anguish and
tormet, looking like nothing more then
a soul falling apart.
When they fall they have a purpose,
when i fall i am a mistake in the making.
How the earths prays to gravity for rain to kiss its cheeck,
and how the earth laughs in my face as I fail to stay in
connection with the clouds.
But what people seem to forget is
that everytime i fall,
you pushed me.
Author notes
PROMPT: for if rain drops can fall where they wish
why can't i?
- i hope its okay i used the prompt as the title-
title credit goes to Oh.My.Juliet's poem "Wishing Well"
h e r e c o m e s t h e s u n
A contest entry
- For my Favorites and by Invite ONLY by Not-The-Sun.
2000 points, ended November 12, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
spelling and grammar errors?
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i love that you took the prompt and turned it into a title; it fits perfectly with this amazing part:
But what people seem to forget is
that every time i fall,
you pushed me.
incredible. i wish that you would take the time to look through grammar and spelling mistakes in this piece. but other than that, i absolutely think you did a stunning job with the prompt : ) thank you for entering! -
I read about your issue with spelling, :-)
let me say thatyou are very talented. Keep writing and touch the many people you do.
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**cheeck** should be --> cheek
LOVE
BRILLIANCE
win or else
love it a lot
so great
Kat♥
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Hi
Sis this is amazing I love every line of this poem . Very good enjoyable and loving write. I enjoyed reading it. What a marevelous job this is. I can so relate to this poem. Keep da ink flowin
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OoOo, girrrlll! This is beautiful (:
I feel honored that you choose this prompt! And you did amazing with it,
When they fall they have a purpose,
when i fall i am a mistake in the making.
this is like my life, everyday! Its crazy that you could capture such emotion and put it into words. if i could give more than 3 clappies I would!
x
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