The words,
once colliding in ravenous need,
whipped by whirlwinds of passion,
found fear and deceit
and froze in mid air,
with somersaulting pain.
Wisdom wept powerful tears
as it heard a dimming heartbeat
and the last sun set upon
a stilled breath of perplexity.
Past echoed its fine beauty,
where acceptance
had grown and bloomed
within humanity's wondrous smiles.
But today,
the memory flows,
as the distance shivers,
avoiding capture.
Now mind and breath
are dulled and speechless,
as the disquiet infects thought,
becoming gnarled and sad,
whilst the precious sky falls.
Author notes
A l i c e i n P o e t r y L a n d
Write a poem in any form, including free verse and prose, on the following quote:
"The silence depressed me.
It wasn't the silence of silence.
It was my own silence."
-- Sylvia Plath, "The Bell Jar".
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A contest entry
- Prismatic Words #1 -- Plath quote prompt. by ZachP.
650 points, ended November 10, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite quickie by Mango Memories.
400 points, ended November 26, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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unqiue.
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This is a wonderful penning, Poet. Your final stanza was staggering in its depiction towards Sylvia's poetry, her life and lifestyle. Beautifully portrayed. Congratulations. 
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Stark, beautiful writing, Gaylene...
Congratulations on a well-deserved win with this haunting pen...nods...
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Gaylene ~ what impresses me about your writing
is that you are able to capture so much,
in simple language that doesn't have me running to my dictionary in panic;
and that is such a valuable skill,
as you don't sacrifice one iota of meaning in the process.
Wow.
The image in your first stanza especially, and your imagery throughout filled my mind's eye.
And the feeling of your poem . . . did I say
wow?
I started this contest hoping to critique and criticize . . . I've been knocked down a few pegs
My best,
Zach Estel. -
This is fantastic
Its so beautiful and deep with amazing imagery and meaning, A great take on the quote prompt, my favourite lines were
Wisdom wept powerful tears
as it heard a dimming heartbeat
I love it! Best of luck in the contest 
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excellent
Another amazing write. So very powerful and creative. Best of luck in the contest
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