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Cosmic Dream

This wild, deserted island was Paradise to me
Soft, silken sands of comfort beside an azure sea,
caressed the soles that carried my feet across the beach
to where the figs of promise where just within my reach.

Whilst sitting, contemplating just what had brought me here
I gazed into the distance and wiped away a tear
at last it didn't matter what storms I'd faced before
as I stood for a moment , then walked this sun drenched shore.

My toes caressed the sea shells, that lay beneath my feet
then bathed within the shallows where land and water meet
as heart and soul connected with elements above
I felt within that moment, a pure and selfless love.

As cosmic forces held me with hands of golden fire
I felt a sense of purpose,tinged with a great desire
to stay within the bosom of what created me
and walk the path of freedom into infinity.



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  • islekine gold member
    October 30
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    Wonderful imagery!

    I enjoyed this very much! Thanks for sharing your talent!
    Best wishes in the contest and always!

    and


  • aboomer silver member
    October 29
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    Lovely - great emotion, images, depth - most enjoyable.
    nice job!

    thank you for your entry
    best wishes in the contest


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    October 25

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    You have captured with your words and emotions so many images I can see clearly and i especially loved the third stanza.
    This was pure joy to read.

    All the best in the contest.

    Sue

  • Durlon
    October 25

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    well done

    Flows well. Good rhythm. Good rhyme. Good imagery . I like the theme. One spelling error jumped at me: "where" in first stanza, line four.


    • Gwenevere
      October 25
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      Thankyou for your comments.No spelling error, it really is where


  • windsong721
    October 25

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    Beautiful!

    This is a true work of art with phenominal imagery, great phrasing and wonderful rhyming and rhythm. I'm visiting key west at the moment and just happened to be sitting on the beach when I read this. Simply a gorgeous writing. Thank you so much for sharing this !

  • catstar
    October 25

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    Amazing work! You have something of everything that a reader could possibly want. Beautiful descriptions, stunning uses of phrases and poetic features such as aliteration and then such a powerful sense of atmosphere, I felt like I was walking across that beac myself. This is truly a stunning piece. Thank you so much for sharing.


  • evershine-90
    October 25

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    Wow, this is soo beautiful! It has and enchating and captivating feel to it. Nature is god's creation of beauty, and you have brought that feel when one entwines with this beauty. Great job and thank you for this glimpse of soulful love.


  • World So Cold
    October 24
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    ^w^


  • DogFish silver member
    October 24

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    Beautiful, seamless poem!
    I liked the way it felt on the toungue: "Soft, silken sands of comfort beside an azure sea..."
    The words you've choosen are all so very soothing to speak, hear and envision.
    It offers warm consolation just to read it.
    Well done!


  • Howl- gold member
    October 24
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    fantastic!

    this was an amazing read! you really summed up an ethereal experience and your language was soothing and sublime!
    bravo!

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