What paradise means to me?
A quiet place, tranquillity,
where jealousy is just a word
that somewhere in the past you heard.
and truth can shed the bridle's thrall
of cruel words that maim and maul.
Where man at last has learned to be
the staff that sets his brother free.
A contest entry
- Semi-Quickie: Word Prompt - paradise by mgmc.
700 points, ended October 27, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Very nicely structured. Rhyme works beautifully. Well chosen title that enhances.
Great imagery..."bridle's thrall.......maim and maul" --very nicely chosen. I like this very much. Thanks for your entry. Best of luck!
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a paradise worthy of our pursuit.
nicely written.
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what a lovely short poem....ohhh..i read this and thought of Shakespeare lol!
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Oh how beautiful! Especially that last line! It resonates like a bell through so many meanings!
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Another nicely turned effort.
Well wishes in the contest.
Thank you for sharing.
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SO BEAUTIFUL!!!!!
And what a precious paradise this would be!!!!! Let's pray for one day these cherished things come to be. 
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Hello
Long time since I saw you here. Real busy I suppose.
Poem was nice. I do prefer it when you rhyme and love eight count.
Hope all is going well for you Island Dreamer!
Jim
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