I hear the power tools on high speed and it makes me shake in my bed, thinking about you magicking your way up through the vents and severing me into pieces. I can picture you so easily, with toy troll hair and a dungeon of death stare; I can imagine your gritty teeth grinding bone on bone, with each grind comes a grunt and I can practically hear your heaving breaths, making the atmosphere in the room so heavy that it makes my power ranger comforter feel embarrassed that it's too thin to protect me. And that chain saw you carry must just be for delight; because I know you hide an axe that would make me aw struck at the sight of it swinging down onto my neck.
And I wait, listening to your deranged thoughts on what you will do to me tonight.
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Author notes
10 lines and one word : (
prompt:
male witch.
this is about being terrified of my dad when I was a little kid.
sucks to be me; alone on thanksgiving.
A contest entry
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Comments
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I'm so sorry you had to endure that kind of terror as a child. Great write though, Thanks for entering the contest and best of luck to you! Keep writing!
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thank you so much for gold! I appreciate the points and the comment!! : )
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I can't dislike this at all, I loved how you made me imagine I was a child once more thinking of the monsters in the basement.
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I see a child's point of view in this, I saw it before reading your AN. Makes me think of Jason, hehe. An enjoyable read, thanks for entering and good luck.
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Awesome!
Good luck in the contest!
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Oh wow this is a very deep write, and you did a great job portraying what you were feeling. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck in it!
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The description is appropriate to he prompt and shivers run downmy spine and Iam drenched in the sweat of fear even inthe winter chill or the pleasant environs created by the airconditioner.The image your words bold and vocal create is really horrible and yet very very alive and vibrant.Keep sharing your talent with me and take care. Love always, Smita...
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forgot the applause haha
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You never cease to amaze me with your words. Well written and truly chilling. The imagery of this tale shook my bones. The an is what struck me and only made the images more terrifying. sending many hugs your way.
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i totally overlooked your an. my previous comment is totally inappropriate. i apologize. it must be terrible for you to go through like that.
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....wow...the A/N really strike me...at first i was thinking...what a chilling tale..perfect for halloween..but after reading that note..here's for you
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scary goodness
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ooooooh i love it! the imagery here freaked me the heck out
briiiiiiiiiiiilliant! you really dont give yourself enough credit
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This is really well written, hun.
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