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re-educating the wind

i went to find him yesterday

between street vendors,

busy bankers and walgreens

there was no description,

facial features or scars

 

it was a voice, slipped like rain

on glassy oceans, sunsets

and soda fountains

 

i saw the purpose of this

as education of

a perpendicular woman

with too many squared edges

an unrounded chin

 

my hang-ups

lack of perspicacity

confidence and saddness

at being here when she felt older

 

it was that voice

who whips you

round invisible corners,

tears up your pavement,

skates past and you curse-

too fast, too young

too anything at all 

 

then he laughs

it hits you between open mouthed

and a hello

 

so infrequent

you have to follow 

to see if it's real

 

or a seasonal mirage

playing tricks

 

and when the street lights dim

and houses refurbished

put up for sale

disappeared

 

he takes you to that vendor

for the first anniversary of shock

 

kisses you in front of the new guy

who doesn't have a clue

you'd been hooked years before

 

 

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  • Mango Memories gold member
    October 29
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    I saw this run in my mind. the whole time. Bravo!


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 25

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    What a delightful and interesting take on my drawing

    My word, you have definitely stepped outside-the-box here and seems to have made this piece very personal..I can feel much love and passion deep with in this charming piece..may I say...metaphors, metaphors, metaphors bursting from the page..In my perspective (which may be way wrong).. "A Streetcar Named Desire" enters my mind as I read this piece..don't know why, I may be crazy, but you brought that image to mind
    Bravo

    Thank you penning a piece a piece for my drawing and for giving it great meaning
    Thank you for your entry
    Wish you the best in the contest
    David


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 24

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    your muse is a very ardent lover and i just love how he inspires you, and of course, how you follow. what a wonderful sketch this is!!

    ~ Nicolette


    • Cannonsfire
      October 24
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      Ah Nic I wondered who'd catch the 'who he was' lol you are a perceptive reader C