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Asleep or awake?....Both

Am I sleeping?

I cannot see your eyes

But is that really normal,
or is it all a lie?

Am I waking,
or is my mind just lighting up?

Is this freedom,
or do the bound get all the luck?

With nothing strong for answers

one can hardly see what's true

Is this right,
or am I just as lost as you?

Have I died,
or has it only just begun?

You don't think so

Are we still the same as one?

A sound

A gentle whisper on the breeze

Never-mind

It was just the hollow trees

Am I choking,
or is it just hard to breathe ?

Tell me

Is it really time to leave?

No

My pessimism bleeds right through

But drips of thoughts

Aren't always true

Are you even reading?

Are you still awake?

Have you brought another promise
With a ribbon of mistake?

My eyes are  sticking

Staying shut

But now I see the truth

There's no such thing as luck

Am I sleeping?

There's light inside my eyes

But is that really normal,
or is it all a lie.....

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  • The Otep
    October 27

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    This is brilllant! Truly! This really got me thinking. I love how you used metaphors and different ways of writing this. Great job ((as always!))


  • Failed-Dreamer
    October 24

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    I like the spacing of this write. It adds emphasis.

    Great job :]