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Harvest



Kerplunk.
Harder than the
sting of falling raindrops,
the pain felt from fall's crop of
pecans.





c2009
10/23/09


Author notes

This is a cinquain: a five lined metered poem with a syllable count of 2-4-6-8-2. It is generally written about nature. It is similar to a haiku, but developed by an American woman in the early 1900s.

Written for the contest: Contest Cinquaintly Fall by azure8
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2464571

Entered in the contest: FORM POETRY---III by rinzurajan
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2465509

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  • Peteskid gold member
    November 29
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    oh yes not all of the falls are gentle, some can hurt a fellow truely, nuts and seeds can be hard ad fall fast, pecan are happily smaller than coconuts......PK


  • azure85 gold member
    November 7

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    This is a delightful cinquain, and it certainly is very autumny with the pecans. Time to make some yummy pies! I enjoyed your cinquain alot, very humorous. Thank you so much.


    • Elrenia
      November 7
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      Thank you for the comment. And, also for the placing.


  • whispersoftly
    November 5

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    I find this hard to read, not the words just the colours. They seem very light on the page and I strained to read your poem. Although I love your entry, worth straining the eyes for. Keep writing x Cheryl


    • Elrenia
      November 5
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      I agree; I was hoping it was just me. I fixed it. Thank you for bringing it to my attention.

      And the lovely comment.

      rous


  • rinzurajan
    November 3
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    whats a cinquain???u havent entered in ur an...thats why deleting u...

    • Elrenia
      November 3
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      I would like to have the chance to rectify that.


  • Rheea gold member
    October 24

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    lol oh this is wonderful I grew up with pecan and walnut trees.


    • Elrenia
      October 24
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      Thank you so much. We have three pecans trees, although only one actually produces. Ours are over one hundred years old.

      rous


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    October 24

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    I like this a lot, wasn't Kerplunk an old childrens game ?

    Such a brilliant word.

    Many clappies.


    • Elrenia
      October 24
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      It is a kid's game. It is also an onomatopoeia.

      Thank you for taking the time to comment.

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