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Who Shall We Save Today?

Missing image
Summer glows ripe with baking heat,
Breeze has left for a vacation,
Unconscious bodies lie napping,
Dogs and cats in deep comas sleep.

Little children appear to be resting.
Forming strategies awaiting release
Planning next forays into action
Their help needed to keep the world straight.

Mrs. Thompson complains of the dust.
Fears apocalypse if home not dirt free
Children’s brigade machinate her rescue
By hosing inner walls and furniture clean.

Next on agenda kid’s jungle patrol
Death march across skyscraper log
Grim Reaper watches from creek bed below.
But angels guide each step of the innocents.

Precious memories can fall into sleep.
Still alive they remain hidden away.

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  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    October 24

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    Lovely picture.

    Lovely poem.


    • mgmc gold member
      October 24
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      Thanks Jenny. All the best!

      Marlene

  • UnbreakableSoul gold member
    October 24

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    Wow, very interesting write, cleverly written.
    Thank you so much for your entry and good luck!

    Geneva

  • reveller silver member
    October 24

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    so..

    descriptive, the picture wasn't necessary in some ways because you painted such a good picture with your words. I loved the penultimate line. Lovely to read.


  • Rick Weston silver member
    October 24

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    a vivid scene infused with wondrous action and great heart. i really like "grim reaper watches from creek bed below but angels guide each step of the innocents"

    a treat to read. well done.


  • penman gold member
    October 24

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    Wonderful

    very creative and so well expressed. Such a great write. Best of luck in the contest


  • smitaanand
    October 24

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    This is very nice and the portrait painted with vivid strokes of imagination and strewn with simple yet hueful word like gems is a joyous and enchanting memory to behold and it is vibrant almost alive and breathing.this is like a foray on an unseen unconventional lane of unusual thought made familiar by your creativity.This one was a delight to read and relish like a delectable morsel of thought strung in rhythm.Glad I clicked on this one.Take care and keep sharing your talent it is very authentic and beautiful...

  • Pogo7747
    October 23
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    Nice match. An eerie poem and well done.

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