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The Fall of Felicity

 

Night's squeeze freezes all the air within my lungs,

with goodnights to the ones I love upon my tongue.

Part of my heart was left in his custody,

the remaining piece peacefully died inside of me. 

 

With white flag shown, alone and no longer whole,

 I gave in to the mortiferous bleeding of my soul.

Gazing through the hazy glazed fluid wall
my eyes start stinging singing 'long with nightmare's call.

 

My mind is wandering, pondering, stuck on morbid thoughts.
So distant from my heaven, hell is all I've got.

A myriad of dreams lost cost me sanity,

With a kiss goodbye I came to grips with misery. 

 

 

Author notes

What do you call an angel far from heaven?
I like using slightly off internal rhyme!!!
Lol this is what I get when I write about my feelings, sad isn't it daddy?

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  • I think content-wise this was pretty good. My only suggestions for improvement is to make this have a consistent syllable count (this will help with the flow) and also...edit the last two lines so that they rhyme. Sanity and misery just didn't work for me. Other than that, what you have here is enjoyable, so thanks for entering.


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    October 23
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    Nice, O daughter O mine.

    I like the slightly awkward sounding stuff tossed in there like 'lost cost''

    You are an angel.