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Apocalyptical Eclipse

(Verse1)
When the sun falls
look up at the sky
as beautiful as ever
we exist without light

(chorus)
Misanthropes unite
let the truth unfurl
a most wondrous sight
the core of the world

(Verse2)
When the moon falls
Look unto yourself
Search this detestable life
In the dark we insured

(chorus)

(instrumental solo)

(Outro)
When the heavens fall
Look into His eyes
And tell me what it is
We live for
Tell me what it is we’re here for
Tell me what will happen when the sky falls

Author notes

I wrote another poem Dimensions of Us for a contest entry. i really liked the feel of it and started writing music to it.when i started to sing with it...i came up with these lyrics. so needless to say this is Dimensions of Us revamped with music... i think i still sounds pretty good and when I'm completely done with the song the music will do it justice! -(hopefully)

be honest. im not one to get mad at criticism...i just want help. how will i improve if you don't tell me what's wrong?? please and thank-you!!

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