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Snow queen

When was the last time
my heart bloomed with love?
The light of love breaking the dark
of the cave my heart has turned to
I can't remember

When was the last time
I allowed a hand to caress my skin?
This warm touch of affection gliding on my skin
not feeling the scars deep within
I can't remember

When was the last time
a kiss landed on my lips?
This gentle breeze of intimacy
releasing thousands of butterflies inside my body
I can't remember

When was the last time
I danced with a soul willing, able to see behind
the stone wall I built for protection?
Seeing through this mask and leading me
in waltz steps to the moon and back
I can't remember

Ice cold tears turn to snow
as I check my memory and dwell in my loneliness
Fear being my only company

Maybe one day I find enough courage
to open up and serve my heart on a silver tray
Until then I shall be the snow queen
locked inside my castle waiting for the right one
to find his way to me

 

 

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  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    November 21

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    This warm touch of affection gliding on my skin
    not feeling the scars deep within
    I can't remember

    Loved these lines. You did an amazing job with this. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    November 18

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    This just pours forth so much depth of feeling!
    Wow!
    A fine entry this is!
    Thank you for sharing your poetry with me and the very best of luck to you in this contest!
    ~Heavenly~


    • Enrinye
      November 19
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      thank you for your kind comment...

      take care and good luck with your contest
      Suza


  • Dark-Ecanus27
    November 8
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    good write that expresses a common story. thank you for sharing this and good luck in the compatition.


  • hershey101
    November 7
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    i enjoy it because its like how I feel I liked the last lines and thanks for entering good luck!!


    • Enrinye
      November 7
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      thank you so much for commenting...

      take care and good luck with your contest
      Suza

  • nicley done wquite interesting thanks for entering and good luck!
    -Mary-


  • bunnyslasher157
    October 30
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    well done

    Interesting.. I would have never of thought something like that. good luck and keep writing!!


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    October 23
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    I LIKE THIS A LOT

    GREAT EXPRESSION

    CAME THROUGH BEAUTIFULLY

    WELL DONE!

     

    God bless you my friend...

    • Enrinye
      October 23
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      thanks very much, you're really sweet...

      take care
      Suza

  • great emotion and very nice description and personification i love it, good luck in the contest

    Mary

    • Enrinye
      October 23
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      thank you very much for your kind comment....

      take care
      Suza

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