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musing on a fall day






 

I feel the morning air peel me
as I stand contemplating
the s.o.s. signals
shooting off into my head;

and I don't know anymore
which way north or south

or the four o'clock shadow
on my sundial.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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utter crap...

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  • Thoughtful Seeker
    October 24

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    Good, Good!!

    Back and forth. To and fro. Which way will Miss Alissia go? If you go north you're sure to freeze. If you go south it melts your cheese. Now that's utter crap, but yours was mighty good. Here, wear this scarf made of belly button lint and all is well. Jani Wani Foo Foo


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    October 24
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    fall is in the air time for the winter and to sleep until sring well penned hun Hugs Always Angel♥


  • transcendental baby gold member
    October 23

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    This feels like a blustery day of mixed signals and directions! Glad to see you back here writing