I walk the path I walk today
The same I'll walk tomorrow
Since I came it's been the same
My coming was my sorrow
Walk beneath the thunderheads
Alight with shards of star
Tomorrow you will be gone
I'll be here you'll be far
Worry not of falling rain
Don't dread my thunderstorms
Come dance inthe rain with me
If you're cold the rain feels warm
I walk this path I've always known
I've walked it for so long
But when I walk this path alone
For you I must stay strong
any advice?
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WOW. I can feel the pain you felt being alone.
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I enjoy poems that rhyme & this one was no different.Good work,keep the ink flowing!
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Really enjoyed this.
I think if flowed nicely and I like the idea of it
Very good, keep up the awesome work!
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This is pretty good but sometimes the rhyme seems forced. Just let it flow and I think it would be a much better poem.
I like the message though, it's really sweet.
Good write.
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Great Write
Thanks for Sharing
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hey
great poem really love how you encorperated rain (i love it to!) suggestion would be that you fix the second stanza a bit it sounds sorta awkward if ya know what i mean but besides that its great ok ! have a good night! - Laura Victoria Cousineau
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