I had the world in my hands
My love forever secure
Until one day the faniticy ended
And my dream hit the floor
My heart seemed beyond repair
In my tears I begain to dround
Yet still i pressed forward
Even with my world crumbling down
Im stronger then ever now
Though I admit im very guarded
Ive even met someone new
This guy is so kind hearted
He understands my pain
And is willing to give me time
He inspires my to write again
Its been a year since my last ryme!
Who knows where life will take me
After college and beyond
And with this guy who was my best friend
But with whom theres now a greater bond
be honest, tell me what you think.
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I agree about the spelling, it is a distraction, but I love the overall content. Good job!
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spelling.
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aww this I can relate to, Its never good when you stop writing cause it makes your best poems come out of sorrow. but we stop cause its the functioning with out someone we got use to that has stopped glad to see you found yourself again.
You have a natural talent for expressing your thoughts, keep writing don't stop i look forward to more of your poems.
my fav line;
My heart seemed beyond repair
In my tears I begain to dround
Yet still i pressed forward
Even with my world crumbling down
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Oooooh i like this... there is one stanza I read and thought 'Hey that is me!!!'
Im stronger then ever now
Though I admit im very guarded
Ive even met someone new
This guy is so kind hearted
He understands my pain
And is willing to give me time
I really like this section. Wicked good job.
Louise
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great job thanks for sharing.
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Hey chickie
Great poem, glad to see your happy with someone.
Overall i like it, oh come online more so we can talk
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