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Phantasmagoric Dementia.

It started as a simple vision-
Locked away amidst darkened memories.
Dwelling within the mind, subconsciously,
Evolving into something more;
Microcosm turned to macrocosm-
A genesis of sorts.

A formation of phobias that once
Meant nothing, becoming real-
Formulating into wavelengths of
Irregular thought-patterns,
Focus diverted from reality
To this newly discovered concept.

A temporal fascination, the descent
Of sanity spiraling yet encompassed by
The delicate walls of the human skull.
Misery intensified, despair settling although
Perplexed at how one inconsequential fear
Became the beginning of a psychosomatic destruction.
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Written on October 23rd, 2009.
-Sadien-

Author notes

I guess I could say that this was pulled out of one of my schizophrenic, paranoid delusions. After all, half of my poetry is the result of trying to describe my thoughts...

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  • vampireblood
    November 30
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    I liked this, your poem was very descriptive. I liked the word choice as well. Very nicely done. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.

    ~Vampy


  • InMyFlames
    November 11

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    "The delicate walls of the human skull.
    Misery intensified, despair settling although
    Perplexed at how one inconsequential fear
    Became the beginning of a psychosomatic destruction."

    i love these lines.

    Thx for entering this intense poem you are def going on my finalist list :

  • BrokenGlassRose
    October 31

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    hmmm interesting. Very discriptive and your word choice added to the mood of this piece very well. I especially like the line "yet encompassed by/ The delicate walls of the human skull." I do have some advise. You want to end you lines with the most important word and on some of them you have words like of and although. Otherwise, good.


    • TheSpiralGenerator
      October 31
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      Thanks but I'm quite comfortable with the way that I write. Your idea of ending the lines with the most important words may work for you, but the way I write works enough for me. However I do thank you for the advice nonetheless.

  • division gold member
    October 26

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    this write was very original and i liked the emotion and power throughout it. plus, the title pulled me in and your words kept me focused.

    good job and good luck!


  • XxwhisperonthewindX
    October 23

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    excellent work

    It started as a simple vision-
    Locked away amidst darkened memories.
    Dwelling within the mind, subconsciously,
    Evolving into something more;
    Microcosm turned to macrocosm-
    A genesis of sorts.

    great detials good luck in the contest!

    -Mary-


  • VelvetWings
    October 23

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    That... was really intense. It's unlike everything I've ever read from you but at the same time it has you written all over it...
    I love it...
    ~Sparrow

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