Liar
liar
and damn liar
you lie so smooth
with no shame
and compunction
making no face
staying straight
goring hooks
you beguile
one after the other
sweet talk
turns into
treacherous spark
you have one page too many
on some, one can see you
on others, you hide all
what is that you are after
with all your lies.
I am apalled
they told me all !
victims have gathered
exchanging notes
collecting their twitched feathers
they are in club
you are the talk
on that hub
when most will end
for you and your acts
this,perhaps is that bend !
you had never thought of being caught
you reckoned your intricate net was well wrought
now its ripped
you are being shipped
you liar
to a state
where there are no buyers.
Author notes
they told me all !
Now ,now do not get thinking that this applies to you..unless you actually do thus!..grins
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It's about romance? I wouldn't have guessed that if I hadn't seen what list it was classified in.
It sounds to me like you're talking about... how do I explain this? You know... a person who thinks they're better than everyone else and demeans people so he/she can feel more superior. Then the victims get together and combine powers and conspire against him/her. Justice is served.
Flows well, nice rhyme, overall, great poem.
Quick question, does the line "I am apalled" have anything to do with an appellate jurisdiction? Is this also about a trial?
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...one page too many. It's been said we can have as many pages as we wish and write anything upon them, or even tear them up and throw them away! (praphrased philosophy of Richard Bach) But you are right, the story simply does not hold water if it does not follow through and if you want credence, principle and truth must be at the core of it, because it's all that will withstand the test of time. Good poem, sg.
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Nope, not guilty this time. lol Very well written and descriptive. Powerful message. God bless.
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.The idea is novel andght thoully running unconventinandpth a deGreat write penned with creative panache and quite a surprise and mildly appalling if true.The imagery is vivid ,vibrant, colourful and innovative.The poem has a soul and it almost breathes alive.Thanks for sharing ...
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wonderful
I really liked this one!! I loved the whole idea behind it!! Cheers!
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Let people take it how they want and don't worry! This is the most truth felt poem I have read in a long time! I give you props for this poem and wish you do not have this problem or are this problem. I do not see you as this kind of person though. This is good and like it a lot. Well Done
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Omg ar you talking about your own self hahaha...lol !!!!
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The last stanza was the best. So what motivated you for this write?
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thanks
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Ah ok
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Brilliant!!! Hate that I can relate to it...but brilliant nonetheless.
I have a lying SOB who is in my life right now...the sooner he gets shipped out of this state the better!!! Funny how quickly things can change.
Great write!
Annie
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Good
(you had never thought of being caught
you reckoned your intricate net was well wrought
now its ripped
you are being shipped
you liar
to a state
where there are no buyers)Best use of imagination in this line. When you do your revision,perhaps you can have the poem read more smooth. It jumps around quite a bit but still it is a very good piece
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Good write they told you all and if people take it personal so what lol let them its just a write after all and yep liars are everywhere but... they get found out
hehehe
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