There once was a stick that wanted to be
More than a stick from a dying tree
He had him a dream he needed to fill
If only he could get off the hill
The hill was high and the tree was tall
And no one came up there at all
No birds, no kids, no dogs at play
No-one to save him on this day
He sat there feeling quite alone
It seemed this was the twilight zone
No-one went out – no-one came in
No-one came there to rescue him
The stick was sad – he lay there still
Upon this God damned lonesome hill
He couldn’t run - he couldn’t walk
There was no reason for him to talk
Then one day as he was lying there
A boy came by and I sure do swear
He screamed so loud the dead did wake
As he went screaming ‘Snake dad Snake’
The stick looked round and wondered why
The snake did not come hissing by
He couldn’t see a thing up there
why did the boy cause him a scare
The boy returned with dad in tow
And said ‘there, dad, I told you so’
And father smiled and said 'you twit
That’s not a snake – it’s just a stick'
And father laughed and bending down
He picked the stick up from the ground
And said ‘you know my little son
This stick, it really looks like one’
And so they took the stick away
From off the hill and from that day
A snake the stick became it seemed
And had fulfilled his long held dream
23.10.2009
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Hope this lives up to what you thought, Beret55....lol!!!!!!!!!
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You and natures little gems have got a real good thing going. I love this and what came first, the picture or the poem? I am trying so hard to get back to writing again and it is going to take forever for me to catch up with everyone.
Sheila
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Hi, mate. Glad to hear from you. I wouldn't woirry about trying to catch up with everyone. It will happen in due course. As for the poem. The poem came first and then the picture. It was written in response to something beret said to me and I wanted to see if I could live up to what he thought. Thanks for reading.
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Excellent
What a great write. And so very creative. Thank you for sharing
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This flows and goes in a wonderful way. In fact it's beautiful!
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Thank you so much. Your comments are much appreciated.
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This was so cute! At the start, I thought you were going to go into a morally deep poem-story, like the LIttlest Candle idea, when you said,
"There once was a stick that wanted to be
More than a stick from a dying tree"
Which, incidentially, were my favourite lines xD But then it just took off on a little humourous rollercoaster of its own! great stuff
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Thank you, Symphony and I am so glad you liked it. I will catch up with you on the weekend, mate. Stay safe.
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Bravo !!
What a lovely poem and
story !! Rock solid penning
'twas a delight to read thank
you !! Brought a smile to my
day ! Take care ,
Best wishes & hugs ,
Friend Easy
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Thank oyu so much for dropping by and reading. Many hugs in return.
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I love it. A pleasure to read.
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Thank you. I will be by shortly, just in the middle of fixing up a new page.
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well aint that adorable lol
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Thank you so very much for such a sweet comment. Be by soon.
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WHAT A CUTE STORY!!!!!!
So warm and tender, a story which would make the perfect bedtime story of a little one.
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Thanks mate. Guess one day I might just have to try and put a kiddies book together and try my luck.
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Great little poem and very readable. I know there are those who collect drift wood and bits of fallen trees to take home and carve into fascinating shapes. I always wanted to whittle the idea of turning a piece of dead would into something useful or beautiful but alas don't have the skills for that.
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Thank you. I always wanted to do something like that to but like you, no skill to create in that fashion.
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haha.. You can do anything.. And be good at it.
You can dream up anything and make it come alive. Your the best at telling a story in rhyme. I love it..
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So very glad that you liked it, mate. Without your thought, I might not never have written either of the stick poems. Thanks for the incentive.
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well,,well,,well,, this does bring back memories from childhood days..father son walks, with lifes lessons taught with no homework needed,,
The flow in this is spot on, the story falls from one line to the next with simplicity. The sign of a crafted writer and a good mind for detail..love this piece..well done you.
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Thanks, my friend. A sort of a challenge I took up from Beret55 who reckons I could write about a stick and give it life. I hope He thinks so...I enjoyed the challenge. Appreciate your stopping by and will be by in a tick.
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you know, using the word 'tick' on a page Beret55 and I wander across could give us the heebyjeebies
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I must be mighty slow....but i know if I think about it, I will eventually get it.
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