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Yo Soy Asi 2

I’m just a poor kid with an old guitar
Playing like a fool beneath the stars.

Please believe me I ain’t accident prone
I do not hump nor do nasty porn.

Don’t be deceived, I may look tame
But I fuckin’ bite if you’re lame.

I’m a bad taste in the mouth
But I’m friggin’ good in Math.

You’ll find me unusual
I am above normal.

I am a virus
For you I’m bad news.

I’m a rebel
But not evil.

I am Dray
Make my day!

Author notes

Syllabic pattern : 10-9-8-7-6-5-4-3
Here's the link to my first piece "Yo Soy Asi" : http://allpoetry.com/poem/5817305
I'm up for combining the lines from the two poems to compose a song. I'll soon have perfect chords for it XD

Which is better? This one or "Yo Soy Asi"?

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  • Superstarjod22
    October 23

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    WoW!!

    I fukin love this poem! I didn't even notice the pattern till the end. And I loved it before that and am only more impressed by the format! I love your style, can't wait to check out more of your work!!


  • Titus gold member
    October 23
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    thanks for the warning. cool