I wait in the darkness of my own mind
Wishing to hear you call my name...
All my life I've pushed people away
Because of how they address me
To them, I am words of hatred
Sorrow, pain, anguish
But to you, I am words of love
Joy, light, salvation
So to my heart, I shall keep you near
I wait in the darkness of my own mind
Wishing to hear you call my name...
My heart can't take much more
Come, release me from this darkened hell
I need to hear your voice, call my name again
Say it with your sweet lips
Take my hand and lead me to the light
I am weakened by their spite
I am lost without you
I wait in the darkness of my own mind
Wishing to hear you call my name...
Author notes
Written on 12th April 2004 at 23:46 GMT for my Michael.
This is special to me because it's the second poem I ever wrote for my boyfriend, and the one that is being published in a book next month. Michael has shown me that I am worth something in this world... Like my poem says, the way he speaks my name just tells me that I'm right to be with him, I'm right to believe that he really does love me... Man, I could go on all day about it! But I won't.
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A contest entry
- Lovers only by gothic samurai.
500 points, ended July 6, 2005, 32 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Nice piece! I like how just hearing his voice will make you better, it shows how much he means to you! Good job!
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Awesome
Wow that is so cool you have such a good writing style and i only comment on poems i really like this is the 1st poem of yours that i have read and it is so awesome i mean its great is has everything love the poetry so keep on writing cuz your are such a great poet Alyssa -
how ever so sweet! Simply divine!
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grrrreatt!
you are very good.. read mine!!! lol i need someone to tell me the truth
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beautiful and so easy to read.thoughtful and endering. i've read many of your writtings and feel lowly compared to what you post. i enjoy your prose and am putting you on my list of favorites. i'ld like to know where you find your muse,if you'ld care to share that info..
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This is a very beautiful poem. I love what the repitition does for this piece. It works in the poem very well.. good job
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I'm so proud that this got published. It would be so much better if the book could actually be found in the shops like you were told! Anyway, yay for this.
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I like that balance here of plaintive longing and tentative out reaching.
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aww this was really good. I've felt like this before and you conveyed it quite nicely. I loved this. Yay-absolutely no chance of me winning the contest but good luck to you!
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Seems dignified and hopeful, yet the narrator seems to think the darkness is too near her still. I do think the use of repetition of the couplet in between other stanzas works well for this poem. The rhyme of light and spite made me wonder if it was accidental, as the rest is freeverse. I don't have a problem with it, just found it a touch odd. Anyways, very well done. Good luck in the contest.
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i like this alot and reminds me of alot of why i started this contest, its a great entry and i wish u good luck
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This is a very beautiful poem. Your take on love in words is interesting, but the ending explains the beginning. I hope you end with a happily ever after.
Absinthe
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I like this and in the darkness of my own mind I file away all the past things that I have learned from and it does impact on my life today.....good luck...freda
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Aww, this is a really nice poem! Nice...Well done, good luck in the contest!! ~Jo~
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how he makes u feel even lol
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awwwwwww thats so sweet sounds like im as lucky as u r awwwww u shuld show him that *nods* im sure hed love to noe how u make him feel
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i like this a lot...very nice poem, well, byez!
~Karinn -random person-
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ooh, very pretty. Me likes the repetition. Make sme miss my boyfriend! So very much... damn not being able to see him for four months... its been two days and it feels like forever!
Heh, but this is your poem, not my rant space
Very well written *cheers*
-Heather
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