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unfactual advice

i am writing an antithesis

where no one wins

nobody tries to be

anything different

 

it will be graded

on a quotient

of how talking

ruined perfection

 

the boy

a random tree

and a first attempt

 

i ran away

because it poked like a stick

 

and for the longest time

i detested the taste of nuts

 

 

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  • jessica rabbit.
    October 26

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    ... which is why I'm still hesitant about that sort of thing.


    You know, it's no wonder that I love reading your work. I love the lack of punctuation and the inherent humor in this piece, especially. You are certainly one of the poets I look up to.


    thanks for entering.


  • smitaanand
    October 25

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    Unusual unconventional .novel strange poignant nd still beautiful .The write simply caress the heart with simply penned honest words straight from the depth of the soul. thereis a touch of bitter sweet humor lurking in the shadows and glimpsed somewhere along the write.The telltale quality adds to the charm.THanksfor sharing and take care and keep sharing...

  • piggyback
    October 24

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    very poignant. The simple style is effective here. Lovely written.


  • geckogirl silver member
    October 23

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    hahaha girlfriend this is priceless.... of full marks... love it

  • Rowan gold member
    October 23
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    lol.


  • JinSays gold member
    October 23

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    lol...you and me both darling
    loves ya,
    jin


  • Randomly Beautiful
    October 23

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    lmao...this could just be taken too many ways...


  • sideways hourglass
    October 23

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    idk what to say. but this is great.

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