Candle light and violins,
bub'ling waters rendezvous
on a winter night of sparkle,
snowflakes all surround
Lovers' shadows in the night,
fragile roses, sweet perfume
of hearts so full of laughter,
magic fills the air.
A toasting to the season,
softly caressing lips;
the scent of wine
warms the scent of seduction.
Author notes
only the middle stanza was written by me, as per contest rules
A contest entry
- Verse and Title by plainoljoe.
650 points, ended December 1, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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wonderful writing..n great imagery..
d middle stanza is amazing..
love at its best..good job!
~Parth.
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Lovers' shadows in the night,
fragile roses, sweet perfume
of hearts so full of laughter,
magic fills the air.
- this is a beautiful image taken place here.
very well written and well done.
haha, and the middle stanza was my favorite , i didnt see your authors note until now. well done again.
i hope you never stop writing.
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Perfect
Your stanza fits perfectly although the last stanza to me does not compare to the first two as the first two stanza's are awesome bubbly, flirtatious and the third is not as sweet but more seductive. What do you think?
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thank you for your entry
Joe -
It marries well with the rest of the portrait. Makes me want to think about New Years Eve, or a candle lit dinner in a corner of an expensive restaurant that sits by the window on a winter night.
Nicely done
Josh
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