Lusciously painted red lips
Heels toppled over from too much wear
Hanging loosely in streets full of fire
Veins swelled from mixed cocktails
She drifts in and out of reality
Bought and sold over again
They all look down on her
She tries to hold her head up high
She was a Goddess once….
When she was Daddy’s Little Girl
A contest entry
- she was a goddess once.. by JinSays.
1103 points, ended November 11, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I tried commenting on this before, but I think AP was messing with me.
I like this poem alot, I have a hard time reading the words though, and had to highlight to read. Might want to lose the red font too-let your words paint the colors...? Anyway, this is a very lovely submission, thank you kindly.
love,
jin -
This is truly sad. She probably longed for the gifts "daddy" gave her as a child and the men in her life misused that innocence. Far too many women suffer from this syndrome and end this way. Very sad but surreal!
Love You ♥
Mom
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A brilliantly written poem. its so sad yet so realistic. it actually almost made me want to cry! x
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This is brilliantly poignant
very powerful emotions pour from brevity
You have woven such a sad story
"She was a Goddess once….
When she was Daddy’s Little Girl"
My daughter got married two days ago...
so this line really hit hard
Well penned my friend
Wish you the best in the contest
David
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aww this is so sad,
but really good i like the last part
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