Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read Contests Groups Learn Forums Store Help
 

a poem about flags

 

 

 

i.

the wind announces itself in flags.

today I can make a poem thereof -

round something off.

I hoist my eyes
to where they kiss each other
on their names;

how easily they live the taste of blue.





ii.

I think about you. what more can I say?

the gestures of my mouth
is a long string of words,
hesitant,
on the tip
of a tapering mast –

my tongue trembles:

the unsayable is the most staccato
of any flag.





iii.

you will ask,
is a flag more flag in the wind?  

I do not know. I do know
that a heart too can wear away
to an afterthought,

the way the end of a conversation
decomposes
to an i-wish-you-well -

somewhere high and gone.







In a list

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 32 of 32

  • Tzipora
    November 26
    Edit | Reply
    wow, well deserved gold.

  • Nicole Hanna
    November 24
    ?
    Edit | Reply
    I think I might actually hate you a little for writing something this phenomenal. Christ. Now I need to go delete all my poems because I'm having a moment of self doubt. lol. This was beautiful. Conversational, but so strikingly poetic. I think I just might need your book now. When I meet stupid people, I can hit them with it, and maybe a bit of your talent and smarts will wear off on them


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 22
    ?
    Edit | Reply
    wow...that last stanza especially blew me away.
    congrats on the gold. I love this poem. something to read again and again. I love poems like that.


  • sheltered
    November 21
    ?
    Edit | Reply
    as the last poem i read was great
    so this is a masterpiece
    fucking brilliant!

  • D.art
    October 31
    Edit | Reply

    loved it

    wouldn't change a word


  • manatee
    October 29

    Edit | Reply
    So much here... blowin´in the wind. The kind of poetry that fills the sheets. -Manatee


  • ccawley gold member
    October 28
    Edit | Reply
    You are a poet genius.
    So wonderful!

  • I should have known something this amazing was written by you.

  • I don't really even know what to say. This is exquisite penning. It should be in a million lists, and gather tons of gold cups. Thank you so much for entering here.

  • Virgoan
    October 26

    Edit | Reply
    After reading a poem of yours, why do you leave me breathless? Vignette is a favorite form of mine. I like how each part stands on its own and assembles a concrete imagery and thought. I like ii the most but the last vignette carries parts that I really really like the line: 'is a flag more flag in the wind?'

    and this part:

    the way the end of a conversation
    decomposes
    to an i-wish-you-well -

    The just right shade of melancholy is phenomenal. Brilliant work my friend.

    Thanks for sharing


  • Peteskid gold member
    October 24

    Edit | Reply
    We have a capacity i think to hold and to let go, it is the choice that is often hard; i have seen this conversation and heard this ending; I see flags flying high...blue sky, i think the two things go together, we need to have seen in order to see...remarkable poetry here, so very telling for us all...PK


  • natari gold member
    October 24

    Edit | Reply
    A beautiful poem and the final wish you well. I loved the hoisting of the eyes. Wonderful imagery. brilliant as always.

    H


  • Leslie gold member
    October 24

    Edit | Reply
    This is pure brilliance, i have no words to express the sadness i felt and yet the beauty, excellent

    Leslie


  • Daizee silver member
    October 23

    Edit | Reply
    'i-wish-you-well'...so final.. so sad. like an acceptance of an ending. I think I'll look at flags a bit differently now


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 23
    Edit | Reply


  • quietly burning
    October 23

    Edit | Reply
    ahh yes "fluttering flags", you do them so well

    ~bb


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    October 23

    Edit | Reply
    well, how can anyone leave a decent comment following allyce's essay down there? this is a great poem. the sadness underlying is easily felt and the images are powerful. that last vignette is definitely the strongest...the emotion is incredibly heavy. without question, one of my favourite nicolette poems.


  • sweet arrival gold member
    October 23

    Edit | Reply
    you certainly can bring tears quickly to my eyes. you always write with elegance and never compromise anything. i want to hug you after everything i read from you. just beautiful, nicolette.

  • Rowan gold member
    October 23

    Edit | Reply
    That last stanza, sentence got me all choked up. This is so beautiful Nicolette.
    sighs


  • SteveS gold member
    October 23

    Edit | Reply
    Wow, I'd choose this poem over my favorite dessert...because it's so rich. I love how you created the flag metaphor and the connotation of waving or not. Melancholy and pensive write..well-penned.


  • katelynmcdougall
    October 23

    Edit | Reply
    probably the best poem poem I have read by you yet... at least in my opinion This is absolutely amazing. I love your ability to give life to any subject, with such beautiful elaboration and contrasting comparisons. So well done! So very well done!


  • arafura gold member
    October 22

    Edit | Reply
    "the unsayable is the most staccato
    of any flag."

    Beautifully expressed my friend. Good luck in the contest.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    October 22
    Edit | Reply
    Excellent


  • Elora Danon gold member
    October 22

    Edit | Reply
    I have tears.

    This is beautiful.


  • Jersene gold member
    October 22

    Edit | Reply
    stunning write, Nicolette...I feel a mournful yet eloquent tone...perhaps the quiet of reflection.

    the last vignette is my favourite. Beautiful, as always


  • Allyce May gold member
    October 22

    Edit | Reply
    I was so excited when I saw this, I thought I might have gone into cardiac arrest – must be something to do with the knowing I am about to read something that will take my breath from me and run away with it laughing mischievously lollll, I have had too many cookies today.

    This feels like a detached observation of sorts, or an attempt thereof; a poem of calculated reflection where emotion manages to peek through – in the gesture and the tremble.

    You always have such consistency in your themes, but not only that, they are also intelligent and appropriate – like here, the wind can move things; touch us; carry noise and scent; we can see and feel its effects but we cannot hold onto it. I feel that is relevant to this poem.

    The last four lines are still stuck in my throat. How rapidly things decompose when they are “high and gone”. The formalness of “to an i-wish-you-well ” is heartbreaking. Like when you stop saying, “I love you” and instead say, “ditto” or “same here” and eventually, “I can’t do this anymore.”

    Such quiet, eloquent poetry you write that always speaks to me and moves me in some way. I adore that first line – what an introduction.

    I would prefer a semicolon or a dash after “thereof” rather than a comma, but of course that is the only weak suggestion I could make in light of your words I'd also change "is" to "are" after "the gestures of my mouth".

    Love you


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 22

    Edit | Reply

    It is a stoic and courageous thing, to raise one's flag when one knows how strong the wind can become, and how quickly, without warning. As always, your command of language and metaphor is tender and profound. It takes a lot of strength to be able to unfurl one's heart-folds, to allow the breeze to lift it high and near the warmth of the sun. Good luck in Trina's contest, my beautiful Friend.



  • Cannonsfire
    October 22

    Edit | Reply
    sigh...this one just makes me want to lose myself, somewhere, anywhere but where I am and if I knew what is was I wanted then I would know where that was..if that makes sense to you and maybe it does C


  • leander Moderators member
    October 22

    Edit | Reply
    I absolutely love the way you manage to write vignettes this wonderfully. The imagery is stunning, the (sad) feelings you've added with them are so familiar as well.

    ... sigh ...


  • aeolia
    October 22

    Edit | Reply
    "somewhere high and gone"
    that is the perfect ending. brava.

1 - 32 of 32